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Home Small Wars Project Perspectives on Afganistan Midterm Assignment Student Recommendations - Position Essays

TASK II: Write and Post a POSITION ESSAY to the wiki. Due Thursday, December 15th. Write an essay that advances a well-supported position on the question below and post it on: Student Recommendations wiki **How should the United States proceed in Afghanistan? ** Position Essay RUBRIC: A quality will essay will •open by setting up a context for the question--briefly explain why the unites States is fighting a war in Afghanistan, •develop a position or specific answer to the question that precisely states how the United States should proceed in Afghanistan, •use two criteria of the Just War Theory to analyze to what extent the U.S.'s involvement in Afghanistan is a Just War, •use three Perspectives to support your explanation of why our involvement in the war benefits or harms AFGHANIS, •use three different Perspectives to support your explanation of why the war benefits or harms AMERICANS, <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•draw supporting information from the articles studied in class which are posted on Moodle, <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•wrap up the essay by restating the key reasons why your position is the best way for the U.S. to proceed in Afghanistan. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•organize your ideas in extended power paragraphs, <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•establish the credibility of sources, <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•cite sources internally and in a Works Cited, <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•edit language errors from writing, <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 14px;">•post the essay on <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #800000; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 16px;">Student Recommendations

Emma Piotrowski

After the attacks on 9/11, we went into Afghanistan to take down the Taliban government. This was successful, but they still attack Afghanistan as a result the citizens live in fear. We have been there since helping build a stable government. With the assignment to answer the question, "How should we proceed in Afghanistan?" I began to think very hard about my answer. After the articles we read in class and the research I did, I am more on the side of staying. We've made a "mess"(Martin) of the government.

There are pros and cons for staying and leaving. On the leaving side, the article The Afghan war and the Myth of Women's rights, it talks about right of women in Afghanistan. The argument is, that by us being there we are actually harming their rights more than helping. Their bodies are becoming a "battlefield"(Bunting). In the article America's costly war machine, it talks about the financial cost of this war, saying that "roughly 1 of every 4 dollars spent on wartime contracting was wasted or misspent" (Bilmes).

On the staying side, many Afghan citizen's lives are in danger. The risk of Taliban attacks loom over everyday life. Unless they have a strong military, they are defenseless. President Hamid Karzai said in the article (article name) that he is going to need support from the U.S for "at least another decade"(Associated Press).

Afghanistan is a just war. There were people who threatened us, and we, of course, had solid proof of this. Afghanistan is not a just war. Civilian lives are lost everyday. More than any of the military. It violates Dictation, but it obeys just cause. Afghanistan is just and it also isn't.

I feel this is the best way because we went in to Afghanistan 10 years ago looking for revenge and we found it, while messing up their government system. The least we can do is help them fix it. Our enemy is not the country of Afghanistan and we shouldn't let them suffer for crimes they didn't commit.

A quality will essay will •open by setting up a context for the question--briefly explain why the unites States is fighting a war in Afghanistan, general claim with little background evidence •develop a position or specific answer to the question that precisely states how the United States should proceed in Afghanistan, generally done •use two criteria of the Just War Theory to analyze to what extent the U.S.'s involvement in Afghanistan is a Just War, general claim not linked directly to criteria •use three Perspectives to support your explanation of why our involvement in the war benefits or harms Afghanis, no wiki perspective referenced •use three different Perspectives to support your explanation of why the war benefits or harms Americans no wiki perspective referenced •draw supporting information from the articles studied in class which are posted on Moodle, some articles referenced •wrap up the essay by restating the key reasons why your position is the best way for the U.S. to proceed in Afghanistan. general summary made • organize your ideas in extended power paragraphs, inconsistently done, a few paragraphs offer no evidence •establish the credibility of sources, a few sources credited •cite sources internally and in a Works Cited, WC and internal citations have minor errors •edit language errors from writing, minor spelling, grammar and other language usage errors •post the essay on Student Recommendations done <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">Martin, Michel. "The Future Of Women's Rights In Afghanistan : NPR." //NPR : National Public Radio : News & Analysis, World, US, Music & Arts : NPR//. Web. 15 Dec. 2011. <http://www.npr.org/templates/story/story.php?storyId=143141872>.

<span style="color: #000000; font-family: eurostile,sans-serif; font-size: 10pt;">BUNTING, MADELEINE. "The Hindu : Opinion / Op-Ed : The Afghan War and the Myth of Women's Rights." //The Hindu : Home Page News & Features//. Web. 15 Dec. 2011. <[]>.

<span style="color: #000000; font-family: times new roman,times,serif;">Bilmes, Linda J., and Joseph E. Stiglitz. "America's Too-costly War on Terror - Los Angeles Times." //Featured Articles From The Los Angeles Times//. 18 Sept. 2011. Web. 15 Dec. 2011. <http://articles.latimes.com/2011/sep/18/opinion/la-oe--bilmes-war-cost-20110918>.

<span style="color: #000000; font-family: times new roman,times,serif;">Associated Press. "U.S., Others Vow Support For Afghanistan Post-Troops : NPR." //NPR : National Public Radio : News & Analysis, World, US, Music & Arts : NPR//. Web. 15 Dec. 2011. <http://www.npr.org/2011/12/05/143130463/u-s-others-vow-support-for-afghanistan-post-troops>.